A cool short blast of fantasy. I haven't read any fantasy novels in forever, mostly because they're usually over 500 pages and part of a 10 part series, so it's good to get a taste of the fantasy vibe in a short story.
That's the turn. Not the scar, not the mountains, not the heritage. That one reframe — he pays you in shelter, that's ownership — and Thomas is already gone before he picks up the bag.
The stranger never explains what Thomas is. He only names what Thomas already does. That's the more interesting recruitment: not promise, but recognition.
"You will return. Just not the same way."
Most stories put that line at the end as comfort. Here it lands as warning. The difference is everything.
Thanks for this comment, Lintara. I follow you, and I know you always really pay attention to details when you write. You made me want to write a sequel. Thanks a lot.
It’ll take me a while to write the Poetic Grimur but if you have any questions which might help you to write the sequel then let me know. I’d love to see where you take this if you write one.
This is great! Hopefully you will continue his story, it will be a fun read. I’ve written three sci-fi novels and some sci-fi short stories, and have been meaning to write fantasy for some time now. My favorite growing up were the Dragonlance novels. This has given me a good boost to get in the fantasy writing mood.
I’ve said it before about your writing but it needs repeating — you have a way of creating such a distinct atmosphere woth your writing, Michael. Like, there is never any doubt about how I should be feeling when I read your stories, which is great! It’s hard to create that kind of atmosphere, but you nail it :)
A cool short blast of fantasy. I haven't read any fantasy novels in forever, mostly because they're usually over 500 pages and part of a 10 part series, so it's good to get a taste of the fantasy vibe in a short story.
Thanks so much, man!
"Then he is your master. Now move."
That's the turn. Not the scar, not the mountains, not the heritage. That one reframe — he pays you in shelter, that's ownership — and Thomas is already gone before he picks up the bag.
The stranger never explains what Thomas is. He only names what Thomas already does. That's the more interesting recruitment: not promise, but recognition.
"You will return. Just not the same way."
Most stories put that line at the end as comfort. Here it lands as warning. The difference is everything.
What does Thomas carry in the bag?
Thanks for this comment, Lintara. I follow you, and I know you always really pay attention to details when you write. You made me want to write a sequel. Thanks a lot.
Glad to hear there's more coming. I'll wait for the bag there.
It’ll take me a while to write the Poetic Grimur but if you have any questions which might help you to write the sequel then let me know. I’d love to see where you take this if you write one.
Sure thing!
This is great! Hopefully you will continue his story, it will be a fun read. I’ve written three sci-fi novels and some sci-fi short stories, and have been meaning to write fantasy for some time now. My favorite growing up were the Dragonlance novels. This has given me a good boost to get in the fantasy writing mood.
Thanks, James! You could try writing something in the same lore. I'd love to read it :)
Beautiful read
Thanks so much, Karen.
Really, really fantastic story, Michael! I could restack every line, just amazing. The depth to it, the characters, incredible. Now I want more.
Thanks, girl! Why don't you take over and keep the adventure going? That'd be great :D
I’ve said it before about your writing but it needs repeating — you have a way of creating such a distinct atmosphere woth your writing, Michael. Like, there is never any doubt about how I should be feeling when I read your stories, which is great! It’s hard to create that kind of atmosphere, but you nail it :)
Thanks, Michael. Hearing that makes me proud and happy at the same time. I just hope I can keep writing things that make you feel that way, bro.
Glad to hear, bro. And I have no doubt you will :)
Not really a fantasy author, lol. Yes you are and you should write more of it. This was wonderfully evocative.
Agreed!
Thanks, Evelyn. I’ll try :)
Michael, this is so good, wonderfully drawn characters!
Thanks so much, Portia :)
The picture above; it’s a vagina right?
Not exactly, but I like your enthusiasm. Keep trying.
I need to go through the lore and such, but your story stands nicely on its own.
Thanks, Johnny!