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I feel like there needs to be more … well done!

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Thanks, Leanne! I'm glad you liked. :-)

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In reading the comments, on your post, I felt the need to comment about dimensionality. We are used to thinking of God The Creator of the universe in just four dimensions, X, Y, Z, Time. But, in reality he exists in an infinite number of infinite dimensions. Some of them, like Love, friendship, power and commitment, we know a little about. But, just as we are unable to comprehend God’s extent in four dimensions, we can never, in our lives on earth conceive of the extent or power of Him.

Your work is an excellent extended metaphor, drawing on the most classic theme of all. Not sure about how one would draw a reader into any of these dimensions and add them to your characters but that could be an interesting tilt.

I can’t wait to see where it goes.

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Gary, your comment is beautiful and has opened a window in my memory. Some time ago I read a book (I can't remember the title, I'll have to look it up) that described God in His musical dimension, starting with a mass by Giovanni Pierluigi da Palestrina. What you wrote reminded me of the concept of musical harmony as an extension of God. I must find that book again!

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Hello, Michael, I'm linking this tomorrow for the roundup... a very original read.

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Thanks! I’m glad you liked, Mercedes.

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The tension between the characters was wonderful, Michael.

The way you used the dialogue and their tones to show us so much about their relationship beyond what was actually said was really well done. :)

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Thanks, Edward! I wrote the dialogue without really knowing where it was going. I had a great time, though, and I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks so much for the feedback!

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Sometimes it’s fun to let the dialogue go where it wants too. It’s helps it feel like your listening to a real conversation rather that crafting one. :)

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Yeah! I'd lost it a little, but I like to write wild :-)

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Perfectly pitched. Nice job!

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Thanks, Steve!

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