Wow! You can really tell a tale, Michael. You also have such a special ability to capture/align/convey the eerie feeling sometimes present in the sci-fi genre.
For example this paragraph of description does it so well:
The Ancient Core of Selene City loomed gray and desolate, like a broken memory. Tunnels stretched around them, eerily resembling a sewer system. Dust blanketed the walls, dotted with faded notes scrawled in half a dozen languages—like stickers slapped on the back of an old Camaro. The hexagonal floor tiles groaned under their boots, some of them cracked and uneven. Signs of micro-structural failure clung to every corner, the place looking like it could collapse at the slightest provocation.“
Thanks Michael, I'm very glad you liked it. And I'm very glad you liked what I like best about writing: the eerie vibe. This story was challenging, I had too many characters to keep up with, but it was a lot of fun. Happy New Year, dude. Heartfelt.
Oh and I love the artwork @marco brunet! I read the story late last night on my phone and didn't look closely at the images, but I'm looking at them now on my laptop, very cool!
I struggled with the story. I got a couple of plot down, but they weren't spinning the way I wanted. So I decided on this one. But ten characters were too many to handle in such a small space, and I couldn't give the story the right depth. It was fun, though. :-)
Wow! You can really tell a tale, Michael. You also have such a special ability to capture/align/convey the eerie feeling sometimes present in the sci-fi genre.
For example this paragraph of description does it so well:
The Ancient Core of Selene City loomed gray and desolate, like a broken memory. Tunnels stretched around them, eerily resembling a sewer system. Dust blanketed the walls, dotted with faded notes scrawled in half a dozen languages—like stickers slapped on the back of an old Camaro. The hexagonal floor tiles groaned under their boots, some of them cracked and uneven. Signs of micro-structural failure clung to every corner, the place looking like it could collapse at the slightest provocation.“
:)
Thanks Michael, I'm very glad you liked it. And I'm very glad you liked what I like best about writing: the eerie vibe. This story was challenging, I had too many characters to keep up with, but it was a lot of fun. Happy New Year, dude. Heartfelt.
You capture the eerie well.
Thanks Michael, right back at you brother :)
⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ Wonderful, Cap!
Thanks, hon!
Di nulla 🥰
Oh and I love the artwork @marco brunet! I read the story late last night on my phone and didn't look closely at the images, but I'm looking at them now on my laptop, very cool!
Thank you. Michael sent me the story and I tried, I had fun. ;)
Sorry for my english, but I'm fully italian. ;)
You're on a roll, bro!
This was a gripping read, couldn’t take my eyes off until I got to the end! And definitely reminded me of the Agatha Christie book, nicely done!
I struggled with the story. I got a couple of plot down, but they weren't spinning the way I wanted. So I decided on this one. But ten characters were too many to handle in such a small space, and I couldn't give the story the right depth. It was fun, though. :-)